"A Choice of a Lifetime" - chapter 1/6

This is the one I'm the least proud of. It's very rough (mostly unedited), drags on in some parts, and is sometimes very heavy-handed. (Yes, here I am giving reasons not to read this!) However, it's very important to the storyline in this AU, since it sets up all of the rest of the stories. I can see how to fix this thing - what to remove, what to rewrite, what needs to change - but I'm just not sure it's worth the time. I would truly love any criticisms on this, to let me know what's wrong and how I could tighten it up.

I do think the last chapter is rather cool, though.

This story starts at the very last paragraph of The Actor. I'll try to post a chapter a day, but I'm going to be doing some traveling soon so that cadence might get interrupted. After the entire story is posted, I'll post a summary, for those of you who can't quite stomach reading the whole thing. :)

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